Midterm presentation feedback and reflection

Link to midterm slides.

Link to feedback notes.

The feedback from the crit and the class is mostly around the storytelling, which is still unclear by now. It feels like now I have all the meat but still lack a skeleton to lift them up and move. I will be writing or sketching out a script or a story graph during the spring break and probably combining something I've been learning from Narrative & Dynamic Systems class. I would probably schedule a one on one meeting with the instructor Brad Macdonald on this too.

Richard has referenced to me a work RIDDLES by Marguerite Humeau earlier, and this time Jono also suggested me to look into her works. I visited the website again and found another work MIST really fascinating and relevant to what I'm doing now. It's a series of sculptures of fictional marine creatures showing ritual and spiritual behaviors mourning death and extinction. I like how it's described in a press release:

"The resulting sculptures constitute their synthetic interpretation: They are players in a grand drama; science-fiction in action; actors on a stage; showing (as much as some scientists have begun to tell) that something major is afoot..."

The background story and layout of the work has contributed a lot to elevate the work from beautiful sculptures to provocative artwork on human's dominant influence upon global climate. Other than the work itself I also found the writing really helpful for me to understand this work. This is something I also need to consider in my paper.

Modified schedule:

Week 09: Narratives and storyline

Week 10: Photography plan

Week 11: Remake for final shooting

Week 12: Remake for final shooting

Week 13: Photo/video production

Week 14: Photo/video production

Week 15: Polish and refinement

Week 16: Opening